Jordan Halon 3D Render

This is a 3D Render using Bioware (Mass Effect) assets to create 's character Jordan Halon. His character bio is a small re-write I did to make it cleaner, more will possibly be added to it.
I understand if anyone viewing this does not like the character's visual design or the character's bio, but understand that I am simply creating a friend's character. Any critiques about the visual design or biography should go to him, not me, I don't decide how someone else's character looks, acts or is written.

BIOGRAPHY

Personality: Jordan is kind and caring, protective of those he love. A true "paragon" in duty, service and sacrifice. Despite his caring nature and hard life he is at heart still sensitive. His anger quick to flare and his emotions sometimes powerful if things get out of hand. He has a good sense of humor and always knows what to say.

Biography: Born February 17th 2165, his parents moved from ship to ship so he has no home of birth. Naturally joined the Alliance at a judge age out of sense of duty. is a skilled melee fighter, learning many styles from military CQC to "street" hand to hand, forming his own distinct style over the years. Considered trustable and dependable he rose in the ranks, many soldiers becoming close friends with him, entrusting their lives to each-other.

During a high stakes mission against a group of slavers his CO was crippled by a grenade, instinctively Jordan dragged him out of the line of fire, slapping medi-gel on him and stabilizing him as him and his squad fought back the impending pirate forces. This event is what led to his fast rise in ranks.
Months after this event he had his own sacrifice in the name of duty.

Jumping in-front of a Quarian girl's body to protect her from an anti-alien rebel's gun while on shore leave. He eventually recovered and quickly became close friends with the girl, becoming intimate together.

During the Reaper invasion Jordan endured many emotional scars and wounds. Failing to protect a colony from the Reaper forces would be enough for anyone, but Jordan had to endure more than just failure, he had to endure killing his own friends as their bodies fell and becoming huskied like the many colonists around them.

Suffering from nightmares and intense memories of these past events in the war, Jordan began to train more intensely, turning his interest in hand to hand combat to full blown mastery and becoming extremely skilled in various forms of firearms and infantry weaponry.
Due to his past dedication and sacrifice, skill and resilience Jordan entered the N7 program where he was found to be profiecent in espionage and long range recon, skills he felt he had to push in memories of those fallen.